Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Finished. Have to decompress it before posting a review. Here's a preview though:
"I haven't dumped this many loads while reading since Penthouse Forum."
(Are we still making sex jokes about this?)
I like your writing style. Recently read someone else's short story and it was annoying because you could tell most of the words were grabbed from a Thesaurus. I hate that. Just write how you talk.
I had a couple of minor quibbles here and there, but overall I enjoyed it.
Don't let my delay in finishing it fool you into thinking I didn't like it. I realized why I'm so adverse to reading right now. It's because I'm forced to read so much lately due to school.
"I haven't dumped this many loads while reading since Penthouse Forum."
(Are we still making sex jokes about this?)
I like your writing style. Recently read someone else's short story and it was annoying because you could tell most of the words were grabbed from a Thesaurus. I hate that. Just write how you talk.
I had a couple of minor quibbles here and there, but overall I enjoyed it.
Don't let my delay in finishing it fool you into thinking I didn't like it. I realized why I'm so adverse to reading right now. It's because I'm forced to read so much lately due to school.
“Every record been destroyed or falsified, books rewritten, pictures repainted, statues, street building renamed, every date altered. The process is continuing day by day. History stops. Nothing exists except endless present in which the Party is right.”
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Thank you for the kind words, I appreciate it. I had a lot of stress over "putting it out there," and encouragements helps alleviate that.
My writing style is, indeed, "how I talk." You notice how much I enjoy coming up with the best words for the thing Troy is trying to describe, on D&D night? That's me enjoying the side affects of writing. But one thing I've noticed is that I think in run-on sentences, and that comes out in my writing when I'm deep into my trance, and just spilling out the story. I go back and can't believe I have paragraph-long sentences, and I thought that was ok. There might still be a few in the next book... my beta readers will let me know. But I fixed at least 50 of them.
But, as they say, one is supposed to eschew obfuscation. I sometimes pause to think of the perfect word that I'm looking for, but in the entire 330k word story, I think I hit the thesaurus twice. My writing style is more Hemingway, than Faulkner, that's for damned sure. I couldn't even wrap my head around Faulkner, in high school.
My writing style is, indeed, "how I talk." You notice how much I enjoy coming up with the best words for the thing Troy is trying to describe, on D&D night? That's me enjoying the side affects of writing. But one thing I've noticed is that I think in run-on sentences, and that comes out in my writing when I'm deep into my trance, and just spilling out the story. I go back and can't believe I have paragraph-long sentences, and I thought that was ok. There might still be a few in the next book... my beta readers will let me know. But I fixed at least 50 of them.
But, as they say, one is supposed to eschew obfuscation. I sometimes pause to think of the perfect word that I'm looking for, but in the entire 330k word story, I think I hit the thesaurus twice. My writing style is more Hemingway, than Faulkner, that's for damned sure. I couldn't even wrap my head around Faulkner, in high school.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Did you just put yourself in the same sentence as Hemingway and Faulkner?!
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
No, I said my writing style was closer to one than the other.
I can't describe a meadow in such a way as to make you think you're in a dream, but I can tell you that beer was cold, and make you believe it.
I can't describe a meadow in such a way as to make you think you're in a dream, but I can tell you that beer was cold, and make you believe it.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Speaking of the thesaurus, what's a word that means "frightened, but daring to hope?"
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
I tried that, and I didn't like it in the cadence of the paragraph.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
“Every record been destroyed or falsified, books rewritten, pictures repainted, statues, street building renamed, every date altered. The process is continuing day by day. History stops. Nothing exists except endless present in which the Party is right.”
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Hmmmmmmmmmmm.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
Is there such a word? I cannot think of one.
It's not me, it's someone else.
Book - "Saved - Book 1 of The Circle Trilogy" - by me
I've made up words before. I will again.
Except this time I won't have an English teacher telling me to stop being creative.
Except this time I won't have an English teacher telling me to stop being creative.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."