GORDON wrote: and I'll read over a mistake 10 times and not see it until the 11th.
Truth.
GORDON wrote: So y'all have an ultra-rare digital copy. Congrats.
Can you sign my iPad so I can sell it?
GORDON wrote: I made so many changes that Kindle considered them not corrections, but a new edition, and corrections would not be carried down to peeps who already bought it... like, all 7 of you.
Got some interesting verbal feedback this evening, "The problem I'm having with it is that this young girl is enjoying it so much."
To which I answered, "She has been drugged nonstop, and groomed by an experienced pedophile, and has no other parental guidance. Of course she likes it, this happens in the real world every day. It's why they invented the phrase 'grooming.'"
After a moment, "Good point."
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
GORDON wrote: Kindle pages read are over 450 so far, today. You fuckers are reading, mortified.
Well, not me yet.
Or me. Still two weeks from business trip.
“Every record been destroyed or falsified, books rewritten, pictures repainted, statues, street building renamed, every date altered. The process is continuing day by day. History stops. Nothing exists except endless present in which the Party is right.”
GORDON wrote: How far in are you that you still consider it "good?" I've gotten almost zero useful feedback so far.
25% - The chapter that opens with Erin in the hospital, recovering, then goes to her back story. Remember that you're in 3rd person omniscient. The narrator knows who the person is. It felt muddled for the first two paragraphs, iirc.
Interested note about the first book... Because I turned the timeline inside out, there's about 2 years of writing experience... And 250k words... Between some of the chapters/sections. Originally, the opening 75 pages didn't even exist, but I decided to "start at the end," and I needed to write an aftermath. So the beginning was some of the last stuff I wrote, when I had relatively more writing experience.
The part with Lucy flashing back to giving her mother medicine was written a couple years ago, by comparison. I feel like I can feel a difference in the writing style. Also, that section was one that kept me up at night. It disturbed me.
So, circling back around to the point, some parts of the book are much older, and written with more experience, than other parts. And I've never had a professional editor through any of.this, so I expect a little slack to be.cut.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
TheCatt wrote: I will say this... I'm glad I'm reading this on a work trip, it's a total boner killer.
Good. I was very concerned that people would think I was writing erotica. But I still need you to read the "Erin's Life" section. That's where the dangerous stuff is.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Been thinking of a short story that would have the potential to be a recurring character.
It is the end times, and Satan comes to claim the earth. The only thing that can EASILY stop him is a guy that already survived hell in the form of 20 years of marriage.
Too on the nose?
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
Currently 108k words in book 2. Doing a partial rewrite, 30% done, wild ass guess is final count will by 100k words. Just putting that here to see how close I get.
"Be bold, and mighty forces will come to your aid."
GORDON wrote: It is the end times, and Satan comes to claim the earth. The only thing that can EASILY stop him is a guy that already survived hell in the form of 20 years of marriage.
Too on the nose, and honesty, hacky. It's a joke that's been done to death.
“Every record been destroyed or falsified, books rewritten, pictures repainted, statues, street building renamed, every date altered. The process is continuing day by day. History stops. Nothing exists except endless present in which the Party is right.”
GORDON wrote: Been thinking of a short story that would have the potential to be a recurring character.
It is the end times, and Satan comes to claim the earth. The only thing that can EASILY stop him is a guy that already survived hell in the form of 20 years of marriage.